Fix some nits, including comma nits, rewording of some parts and an URL nit.

PR:		19261
Submitted by:	Daniel Harris <dannyboy@subdimension.com>
Reviewed by:	jim

1 files changed, 14 insertions, 14 deletions

diff --git a/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/introduction/chapter.sgml b/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/introduction/chapter.sgml
index 32d77bdbe4..cd347271f4 100644
--- a/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/introduction/chapter.sgml
+++ b/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/introduction/chapter.sgml
@@ -1,7 +1,7 @@
 <!--
      The FreeBSD Documentation Project
 
-     $FreeBSD: doc/en_US.ISO_8859-1/books/handbook/introduction/chapter.sgml,v 1.27 2000/04/06 20:28:35 jim Exp $
+     $FreeBSD: doc/en_US.ISO_8859-1/books/handbook/introduction/chapter.sgml,v 1.28 2000/06/08 01:56:09 jim Exp $
 -->
 
 <chapter id="introduction">
@@ -113,9 +113,9 @@
       
 	<listitem>
 	  <para>Strong <emphasis>TCP/IP networking</emphasis> with
-	    support for industry standards such as SLIP, PPP, NFS, DHCP
-	    and NIS support.  This means that your FreeBSD machine can
-	    inter-operate easily with other systems as well act as an
+	    support for industry standards such as SLIP, PPP, NFS, DHCP,
+	    and NIS.  This means that your FreeBSD machine can
+	    inter-operate easily with other systems as well as act as an
 	    enterprise server, providing vital functions such as NFS
 	    (remote file access) and e-mail services or putting your
 	    organization on the Internet with WWW, FTP, routing and
@@ -186,7 +186,7 @@
 	<listitem>
 	  <para><emphasis>Source code</emphasis> for the entire system
 	    means you have the greatest degree of control over your
-	    environment.  Why be locked into a proprietary solution and
+	    environment.  Why be locked into a proprietary solution
 	    at the mercy of your vendor when you can have a truly Open
 	    System?</para>
 	</listitem>
@@ -499,7 +499,7 @@
 
 	  <listitem>
 	    <para>The central source tree for FreeBSD is maintained by
-	      <ulink url="http://www.cyclic.com/cyclic-pages/CVS-sheet.html">CVS</ulink>
+	      <ulink url="http://www.cyclic.com/CVS/index_html">CVS</ulink>
 	      (Concurrent Version System), a freely available source code
 	      control tool that comes bundled with FreeBSD.  The primary
 	      <ulink url="http://www.FreeBSD.org/cgi/cvsweb.cgi">CVS
@@ -628,7 +628,7 @@
         and server support, transaction TCP support, dial-on-demand PPP,
         integrated DHCP support, an improved SCSI subsystem, ISDN support,
         support for ATM, FDDI, Fast and Gigabit Ethernet (1000Mbit)
-        adapters, improved support for the latest Adaptec controllers and
+        adapters, improved support for the latest Adaptec controllers, and
         many hundreds of bug fixes.</para>
 
       <para>We have also taken the comments and suggestions of many of our
@@ -637,13 +637,13 @@
         this (constantly evolving) process is especially welcome!</para>
 
       <para>In addition to the base distributions, FreeBSD offers a
-        ported software collection with hundreds of commonly sought-after
+        ported software collection with thousands of commonly sought-after
         programs.  By mid-January 2000, there were nearly 3000 ports!  The
         list of ports ranges from http (WWW) servers, to games, languages,
-        editors and almost everything in between.  The entire ports
+        editors, and almost everything in between.  The entire ports
         collection requires approximately 50MB of storage, all ports being
         expressed as <quote>deltas</quote> to their original sources.  This
-        makes  it much easier for us to update ports, and greatly reduces
+        makes it much easier for us to update ports, and greatly reduces
         the disk space demands made by the older 1.0 ports collection.  To
         compile a port, you simply change to the directory of the program
         you wish to install, type <command>make install</command>, and let
@@ -682,7 +682,7 @@
         </varlistentry>
       </variablelist>
     
-      <para>You can also visit the master (and most frequently updated)
+      <para>You can also view the master (and most frequently updated)
         copies at <ulink
 	url="http://www.FreeBSD.org/">http://www.FreeBSD.org/</ulink>.</para>
 
@@ -692,15 +692,15 @@
         States, which contains the programs that normally use DES.  The
         auxiliary packages provided separately can be used by anyone.  A
         freely (from outside the U.S.) exportable European distribution of
-        DES for our non-U.S.  users also exists and is described in the
+        DES for our non-U.S. users also exists and is described in the
         <ulink url="../FAQ/FAQ.html">FreeBSD FAQ</ulink>.</para>
 
       <para>If password security for FreeBSD is all you need, and you have
         no requirement for copying encrypted passwords from different hosts
         (Suns, DEC machines, etc) into FreeBSD password entries, then
         FreeBSD's MD5 based security may be all you require!  We feel that
-        our default security model is more than a match for DES, and without
-        any messy export issues to deal with.  If you are outside (or even
+        our default security model is more than a match for DES, and avoids
+        dealing with any messy export issues.  If you are outside (or even
         inside) the U.S., give it a try!</para>
     </sect2>
   </sect1>